Monday, August 16, 2010

DIALOGUE NUTS & BOLTS

HOW TO WRITE DIALOGUE ACCURATELY 

by Jodie Renner, editor and author

See also my Tips for Writing Effective Dialogue.

In another article, I talked about how to make your dialogue less stilted and more natural-sounding. This article just provides a reference for the grammatically correct way to write dialogue, as well as some style tips for dialogue tags. Correct punctuation and form for dialogue will keep your readers from becoming distracted or confused, and maintain their focus on your story. So if you want your manuscript to look professional and your story to read smoothly, follow these technical guidelines.

First of all, start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes. On the other hand, don’t start a new paragraph if it’s still the same speaker.

Punctuation for Dialogue:

1. Put quotation marks around all spoken words. Although in Britain and Australia, it’s more common to use single quotes around dialogue, in the United States and Canada, the standard is double quotes around dialogue, with single quotes for quoting or emphasizing words or phrases within the quoted dialogue. (Italics are also used for emphasizing words or short phrases – but don’t overdo it.)


2. In North America, the punctuation always goes inside the end quote, not outside it:

“What’s wrong with you?” he asked.

“Nothing,” she replied.


3. If the person is asking a question, the question mark goes inside the quotation mark, and a period goes at the end of the whole sentence. The same goes for exclamations.

“Where were you?” she asked.

“Help!” he shouted.

Note that in the above examples, even though your word processor wants you to put a capital letter for “she” or “he”, these need to be lowercase, as they don’t start a new sentence.


4. If the person speaking is making a statement (or a suggestion or a command), replace the period (which would follow if it weren’t in quotation marks) with a comma. Then put your period at the end of the sentence.

“Let’s go home,” he said.


5. If there’s no attribute (he said, she said), put a period inside the closing quotation mark.

“Turn off the TV.”


6. If you start with the dialogue tag, put a comma after it, before your opening quotation mark and the dialogue:

He said, “My game is on.”


7. If you want to put your dialogue tag in the middle of a sentence, put a comma inside the first set of closing quotation marks, and also after the dialogue tag:

“I can never understand,” she said, “what you see in him.”


8. If one person is speaking and the dialogue goes on for more than one paragraph (not a great idea), you leave out the closing quotation marks at the end of the first paragraph, but put opening quotation marks at the beginning of the next one. Use closing quotation marks only when that person is finished speaking.


“…no matter what you do.  

“And another thing, don’t ….”


Finally, a few style tips:

1. The best dialogue tags are the simple he said and she said (or asked), or John said and Carol said (or whatever their names are). These simple dialogue tags don’t draw attention to themselves or interrupt the story line, as they’re almost invisible. Avoid tags like queried, chortled, alleged, proclaimed, conjectured, etc., which are distracting.


2. You can’t use words like “laughed” or “grinned” or “smiled” or "grimaced" as dialogue tags:

“Why, thank you,” she smiled. (wrong)

Why not? Because smiling is not talking; you can’t “smile” words. Change it to something like:

“Why, thank you.” She smiled at the compliment. (Note period and capital “She”)

Or “Why, thank you,” she said, as she smiled at him.


3. Use adverbs very sparingly. Avoid:

“Come here,” he said loudly.

“I’m in charge,” she said haughtily.


The words they say should express how they’re feeling and how they’re saying them.


Jodie Renner is a freelance fiction editor and the award-winning author of three craft-of-writingguides in her series An Editor’s Guide to Writing Compelling Fiction: Captivate Your Readers, Fire up Your Fiction, and Writing a Killer Thriller. She has also published two clickable time-saving e-resources to date: Quick Clicks: Spelling List and Quick Clicks: Word Usage. You can find Jodie at www.JodieRenner.com, www.JodieRennerEditing.com, at The Kill Zone blog alternate Mondays, and on Facebook, Twitter, and Google+.

9 comments:

  1. Hi Jodie:
    Thanks for the excellent piece on punctuation of dialogue. When I am proofreading, this is the single most challenging skill for writers. I spend hours editing dialogue. Writers seem to have forgotten how to punctuate dialogue!

    I enjoy reading your blog. Keep; those wonderful hints for writers coming. I have shared your blog with several writers!
    Regards
    Gail

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  2. Your article on writing effective dialogue is so helpful Jodie. I have shared your blog with several writers who are struggling to write natural dialogue.

    Thanks!
    Gail

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  3. Thanks for your kind comments on both my articles on dialogue, Gail.
    Yes, I find it a bit frustrating just fixing the punctuation and capitalization on dialogue when I'd rather be concentrating on the dialogue itself and how to make it more effective and natural-sounding.

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  4. Excellent tips! But here's what I always get tripped up. In the following paragraph, is it correct to NOT start a new paragraph before "What the problem?" since the action is done by that speaker? Or should "I sat down" go on the previous line?

    "Sit down," Johnny said.
    I sat down. "What's the problem?" I asked.
    "Never mind what the problem is. Just sit there and keep your mouth shut."

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  5. Hi Meghan,

    Sorry, I was unable to access my blog for a few days. The way you have it above is correct.

    Jodie

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  6. Hi Jodie,

    Near the bottom you have a sentence that says:

    Or “Why, think you,” she said, as she smiled at him.

    I think you meant to say, "Why, thank you,"

    Just thought I'd edit your work ;-)

    Cheers, Randy

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  7. Good one, Randy! As we teachers used to say, "Just wanted to find out if you were listening." (reading, in this case) But of course our students saw right through that one! Thanks for that, Randy -- and keep on writing!
    - Jodie :-)

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  8. That's a very useful article, and one that I'll need to keep in mind when writing for a general audience (as a UK writer, there's always some difficulty in the 'do I write in a more American style in terms of grammar and syntax in order to appeal to the wider US audience?")
    Thanks!

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